The Sun Set Loudly #haiku

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Colors shout out loud
Wind howls across blowing sand
A lonely sunset

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Bright colors
Cold sandblasted beach
Lone sunset

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Loud hues
Blowing sand
Sunset

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This was written for Colleen’s Weekly Poetry Challenge.  This week it was free choice of poet.  I did a haiku, but did it three times with the three different syllable schemes: 5/7/5, 3/5/3 and 2/3/2.

22 thoughts on “The Sun Set Loudly #haiku

    1. trentpmcd Post author

      With proper credit and everything, yes, I’d be honored to have this included :) Do you have any details yet on the book you are planning? If you’ve posted about it on your blog and I missed it, just point me there :)

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  1. TooFullToWrite

    Well done Trent! I like how your focus shifted in each of these poems, along with how they all retained their elegance and meaning, even with less and less words/syllables. I’ve never thought of that as a concept, your trio works superbly well together :)

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    1. trentpmcd Post author

      Thanks. This is my first try at doing pretty much the same poem in the three different formats. It was a good exercise. I’m glad you enjoyed this trio :)

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    1. Sandra Conner

      Actually, this stirs me up to write some more haiku myself. Haven’t written any in a long time. I tend to write a lot of cinquain — my first love in syllable-controlled poetry. But then since I created the Tso’i form last year, I’m trying to write more of that as well. It’s difficult — even though it came from me. Go figure. :) :) :) Anyway, I think I’ll focus on a little haiku later today when I get some thinking time. Thanks for the catalyst.

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    1. trentpmcd Post author

      Thanks, Willow! This was one of the most beautiful sunsets I’ve seen, but it was very cold and super window, so I really was the only one on the beach :)

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