Found

auto-aftermath

PHOTO PROMPT © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Doug didn’t know the section of town, but he had received a call, a stranger with a tip.

The ruined house was squished between two others that had “Condemned” signs on the doors.

He hesitated, but there was no denying the car.  Covered in dents and missing a mirror, the car was spotless three years earlier when Em had disappeared on her 17th birthday..

Doug climbed the trash-covered steps and knocked.

There was no answer.

The door wasn’t locked.  He entered.

Em, thin and pale, stared with hollow eyes.  He picked her up and cuddled her.

“Let’s go home.”

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Word count = 99

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57 thoughts on “Found

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  2. Michael B. Fishman

    I really liked this story and the positive ending was nice. But it was the ending that made me think that this story idea is too much for 100 words. I don’t mean that as a criticism of any sort, just that this story is deep and going to 500 or 1,000 words – and still remaining a flash – it could tremendously powerful.

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    1. trentpmcd Post author

      In the past I’ve used these 100 word Friday Fictioneer exercises to create a longer story. I haven’t decided yet, but it is possible I will expand this one. Thanks.

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  3. Rowena

    Hi Trent,
    This was very well written and crafted. Felt so real and while there is a somewhat “happy” ending, it’s realistically low key.
    To be perfectly honest Trent, I have no idea what’s going on beyond my four walls at the moment. I had such an intense time getting ready for the radio station visit and since then, I’ve been writing it up and that took a few takes to reach something I was happy with.
    Today, I also ventured into my daughter’s room with a carer and actually vacuumed the floor…a huge achievement.
    Take care and I look forward to coffee on the weekend. I might even make something out of Julie Goodwin’s cookbook to share.
    xx Rowena

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    1. trentpmcd Post author

      Thanks Rowena. Sometimes it is hard to keep up with everything. I’m glad you are able to get more of those physical types of things done. Looking foward to more about your visit with the Radio Stars. Don’t have a lot of time to read today or tomorrow, so if you post I’ll have to find them later.

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  4. michael1148humphris

    A fine story of a fathers determination. The addictive nature of Heroin is deadly. If science could find a blocking agent to block heroins addictive nature, i think the world would be so much better

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    1. trentpmcd Post author

      It would be great if we could find a way to block that side of it. Or actually, all sides of it. I don’t understand most drugs, but I understand heroin less than the others. You’re right, the world would be much better for the market for it disappearing, even getting down to the level of the Taliban making money from poppies…

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    1. trentpmcd Post author

      Hopefully the story continues down the more hopefully track after those three dark years… Thanks.

      Stopped by and read your story. Sounds like a lot of bad luck…

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    1. trentpmcd Post author

      Thanks David. I can think of several possibilities of why she ended up in the abandoned building, none of them pleasant. And if she is not happy going home right now, she will be eventually.

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    1. trentpmcd Post author

      Thanks Rochelle. Yes he did. And one way to look at it is that she hadn’t hit bottom yet if she still had the car, as dinged up as it was.

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        1. trentpmcd Post author

          Thanks! At least on this side of the pond, these types of stories have been happening too often lately. I never said ‘heroin’, but that is a huge epidemic right now.

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